Jilly: Crafting the Perfect One-Liner. Help!

Can you tell from a one-line description whether you want to read a book or not?

This week I’ve been working on my query letter, and especially the single sentence near the beginning that sums up my story. I could have written another 10k-15k of new words in the time I’ve been sweating over this sentence, and I’m still not happy with it.

On Thursday, I was cross-eyed from wrestling with The Sentence when